It’s Poetry Friday and I decided this was a good day to introduce the concept of using a more well-known poem as model for a poem of your own. I have a selection of them that I like to use with my students and one of my favorites is Thirteen Ways of Looking at a Blackbird by Wallace Stevens. I like this because really, it is just another list. Make a list of thirteen different ways to look at something. It can be something as simple as your dog, your car, your bedroom. Or maybe you want to get fancy and try thirteen ways of looking at your job or a friendship. Just pick a topic and give it a try.
I decided to use this poem as an opportunity to say goodbye to Lily, the hummingbird who has built a nest in my yard but who did not get to see her eggs hatch. I’m sure I’ll be dinking with this poem for a while but it felt good to get a draft of this out. (You can click on the photo to see it larger, if you like.)
13 Ways of Looking at a Hummingbird
1
wings whirl
in place
my face
smiles
swivels
tiny dancer
chirps
cheeps
chitters
hello
2
greengold glitters glides
lands atop the waterfalls
shimmy shakes
a water dance
3
spider silk
blades of grass
lichen
moss
one gray hair
two red threads
building blocks
a mini mansion
4
picture pose
turn left
now right
chin up
hold still
I’ll keep my distance
5
in out
out in
tall wall
soft floor
ready wait
wait some more
egg one
egg two
soon
each morning
each evening
I check
just in case
6
the plum tree a
perfect preening place
ruffled nest feathers
bugs picked flicked
feathers smoothed
stretch once
stretch again
bask in the sun
before babies come
7
stormy days
stormy nights
quivery
shivery
forgetting generations
that came before
I worry
flashlight in hand
8
she disappears deep
within the overgrown honeysuckle
seeking bugs
protein power
for motherhood
alone
I measure
one nest
one half a walnut shell
one egg
one jellybean
one miracle
waiting to happen
9
my days equal
part
inspection
observation
research
photographs
my days equal
bliss
10
camera ready
I await her homecoming
hidden only slightly behind the fence
fifteen minutes
two hundred photographs
my mini model
is a star
11
morning comes
empty
no mama snug atop her nest
no tiny eggs safe and sound
no babies waiting
to say hello world
sometime between
the darkness and dawn
disaster
12
overcast and gray
rain soon
but I am stubborn
searching beneath the bushes
until I find evidence
until I find a tiny white shell
until it hits me
miracles don’t always come true
13
crying
crying
crying
camera clicks
shot after shot after shot
most will be out of focus
unable to capture the pain I feel
at all the days that should have been ahead
suddenly suspended beside me
close enough to almost touch
no chirp
no cheep
no chitter
she hovers there
ten seconds maybe more
just long enough
to say goodbye
— Susan Taylor Brown, all rights reserved
Your turn.
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Beautiful poem, Susan! Lily was a gift to us all, thank you for sharing her with us. The way she has inspired and informed your writing is the greatest gift of all. It’s quite awe-inspiring that a tiny bird in constant motion taught you how to keep still.
Thank you, Jama. I appreciate you stopping by and sharing your thoughts with me. Too true that such a tiny bird in perpetual motion could help me learn to be still. Lucky me.
Aw! I wanted a happy ending. I’m sorry, Susan. Something similar happened to us with some baby rabbits 🙁
Thanks, Tabatha. I wanted that dang happy ending too! Sorry you had a similar sad happening with rabbits. Sigh. Nature is cruel.
A lovely poem for something so sad.
ellie
Thanks, ellie. I’ve missed you. 🙂
Susan, I just most recently heard about your blog. I have had some really challenging times these past weeks & have barely hung on to poetry month, really important to me, but I will return bit by bit to read your posts. I have used this poem with students too & it is a wonderful one to help them see the possibilities of poetry. I only wish I had had yours to show too in my past lessons. What a beautiful story told just today as an ending-or maybe a beginning-to your work.
Linda, thank you so much for coming by to check out my blog. You’re welcome back again, anytime. I’m sorry you’ve been dealing with challenging times but I do hope that you have found some poems, either to read or to write, to help you through the tough stuff. Writing this poem for Lily did help me process it a bit though I am still sad each time I walk out the back door.
Wah…I so enjoyed watching the Lily photos on FB week before last when I had a bit more free time than usual. This week was back to the mad hamster wheel of life and I missed the tragic news. So sorry it had to end this way. Your poem is a beautiful tribute. (Love the one over at Greg’s, tho it is, as you say, bittersweet.)
Thanks so much for stopping by, Mary Lee. I’m glad you enjoyed the photos and the poems.
It still squeezes my heart just to think on it even a little bit.
“EQUINE TIME”
Equine time, a unique experience
Exclusively designed for you
Focusing on things that matter
To you and you alone, absolutely
The horses are the unsung heroes
They share their knowledge to help
Help you seek and find your inner self
Even things you never believed possible
A paddock, the perfect setting
Worlds away from anywhere if you want
Troubles seem to melt away immediately
If you enter with an open mind
Perfection for me “The Meeting Place”
Yes, just sitting, relaxing under a tree
Surrounded by horses feeling like a queen
Honoured they chose to let me into their circle
My virtual life journey was very rewarding
Right beside me, my beautiful special friend
Making sure I was not afraid with every step
This greatly helped to face my past without fear
Each obstacle to represent significant events
Predominately bad, to eradicated them forever
Not such an easy journey to take, not alone
Easier, horse beside to fight the demons for me
The peace of heart and mind is undeniable
Feelings that no words can ever describe
A new beginning a second chance to shine
Leading you forward into a brighter future
The atmosphere on a misty morning, serene
With a magnificent rainbow in the distance
Awe inspiring, beauty personified, natures show
Birds chirping, horses neighing, in perfect harmony
The love that radiates from these horses
I had never know before, love always eluded me
If you are lucky like me, to develop a special bond
Your heart aches to return for your special friend
Life begins after an “Equine Time” experience
– Anne McKenna
Lovely picture you paint for us here, Anne. I especially love the line:
Surrounded by horses feeling like a queen
WOW. Just WOW. You are amazing – what a touching tribute to Lily.
Ah, thanks, Debbi. I wish you could have seen Lily. You would have loved her too.
Just lovely – especially this stanza:
greengold glitters glides
lands atop the waterfalls
shimmy shakes
a water dance
I loved the delicacy of this.
Thank you so very much, Tara. That’s one of my favorite lines, too. She was so funny the way should would almost roll herself into the water.